Thursday, April 8, 2010

Trick Candle

Day 8: RWP suggests another love poem today, using unusual metaphors:

Trick Candle

Painting perfect

picture of my birthday

Your arms wrapped

tight around me


Cliffside lighthouse,

Cobalt blue waves,

Starfish-strewn sands,

and clouds kayaking

Across a placid sky.

In the liquid glass light

I look happy, so do you.

There with the world

laid out behind us

everything seemed

so right, so new.

But you turned out to be

a trick birthday candle

that still won't go out,

a wish that refused to come true.


2 comments:

  1. This is a fun poem. Like the usage of a unique verb in "clouds kayaking". Also like the descriptions "liquid glass light", "star-fish covered.." The end gives this poem character.

    You are welcome to critique mine at http://zevoice.blogspot.com/2010/04/string-of-pearls.html

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